Please Review my Article, Graphics

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  1. GekiDan

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    I recently wrote an article regarding my experiences on online hobby stores in a form of a review.
    In relation to it, I created a graphic to match the article.

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    Please take your time in reading the article and I do hope you can give your comments and advices so that I can improve my next, the part 2 of this, article.
     
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    One thing I noticed about the article GekiDan, is that the link to Great Toys Online, does not appear to include your affiliate link. Is there a reason for that?
     
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    The text under JEFUSION is a bit blurry.. Otherwise, it's pretty good.

    Your articles have nice grammar/spelling so I'd say it's good.

    Nice job.
     
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    Great Toys Online don't offer any affiliates. On the sites that I have used, only Play-Asia had.
    I use their services most of the time since they are located in the Philippines and just an hour or two drive from our place.
     
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    Your review is good and it will help anyone looking for some feedback before buying from one of those stores. It might be worth doing a little keyword research to find the best terms to use in your post. For example, if I was considering purchasing from Great Toys Online and I wanted to get some feedback on the reliability and trustworthiness of their site, I would do a search for "Great Toys Online reviews" and I don't see that term in your blog post.

    Just a short note below, on the English used in one sentence of your post;

    You might want to change that to "it costs less than buying..."
     
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    Thanks for that Fergal. I just changed the sentence you suggested.
    Anyways, I made a slight edit on my article so that I can put Great Toys Online Review and Play-Asia Review.
     
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    I quite like the graphics and the article is nicely written up. The graphic is a little blurry for the subtext part, but not a major issue.

    I'm not sure about having the 2 reviews under the same page though. It seems like you are comparing just them two. I've seen many detailed reviews, with many screenshots, what sections the reviewer like and disliked, maybe a star rating and probably a final personal comment. I would also include a "Come back for Part 2" etc. to let users know that there is actually a Part 2.

    Overall it was well written, though personally, not my niche, but I'd come back and read part 2 :)
     
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    Ah, but you didn't change it right. You've got:

    Drop the does. And it would be better to say addictive, not addicting.
     
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    Thanks Kay. I might have overlooked it. :D
    Anyways, I'm taking up dotdavid's advice to put only one online store review per article on my next entry.
    I think it will be more detailed and to the point this time.

    Thanks for all your help.
     
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    Hey GekiDan, I think the text under the JEFUSION is abit to small and it is hard to read. Other then that, nice job!
     
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    I agree with this one. You need to make some changes in it and it would make it perfect.
     
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    The logo has now been changed so I will never used that logo ever again. :D
     
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    Damn... How did I mistake that? I just read that this thread is one month old. :eyebrow::rolleyes:

    Need to close the thread if you don't need any review now. ;)
     
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    I guess you are right.
     
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    Closing thread by request.
     
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